Keira, a warrior just shy of her sixteenth birthday, will have to survive the creatures of a world twisted by the DNA Wars, and hope her own mutation doesn’t degenerate further as she tries to reach the City of Lights where she will be free from persecution.

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mateekaq · Penpusher · 105 pts

I think you have a very unique idea! Sounds like a rich conflict. I would agree with the comments above on what could help make this logline better.

Former member · Legend · 114,968 pts

Everyone has sort of touched on this but i'll say, this is too damn long. Also, a lot of it could be easily trimmed (the wars) as it is world building which should be left for the screenplay. A logline should just focus on the protagonist and the core story. Hope this helps.

Karel Segers · Mentor · 2,830 pts

Everyone has sort of touched on this but i'll say, this is too damn long. Also, a lot of it could be easily trimmed (the wars) as it is world building which should be left for the screenplay. A logline should just focus on the protagonist and the core story. Hope this helps.