MARBLE HILL SKINNIES AND THE BLACKJACK KID: The story of 2 young men addict to drugs, sex and gambling. They decide the best treatment is to go to Vegas and over indulge the disease.

Nicholasandrewhalls makes excellent points.

The premise brings to mind "Leaving Las Vegas" where the alcoholic character goes to Vegas determined to drink himself to death.? That's his? objective goal -- and he achieves it.?

Which is more than I can discern in this trio of addle brained addicts.? What is their objective goal in diving head first into the deep end of their addictions?? Plots are about people who striving mindfully, intentionally toward specific objective goals,? wise and foolish, constructive and destructive.

Nicholasandrewhalls makes excellent points.

The premise brings to mind "Leaving Las Vegas" where the alcoholic character goes to Vegas determined to drink himself to death.? That's his? objective goal -- and he achieves it.?

Which is more than I can discern in this trio of addle brained addicts.? What is their objective goal in diving head first into the deep end of their addictions?? Plots are about people who striving mindfully, intentionally toward specific objective goals,? wise and foolish, constructive and destructive.

One more thing. Your logline is written from the narrator's point of view.

In order to draw in a reader, it should be written from the lead character's point of view.

This would be an example of a logline written from the point of view of the lead character:

"When his daughter threatens to send him to rehab, a functional alcoholic and his best friend escape to Vegas for one last beer soaked hurrah."