Missing – A broken undercover cop and rookie detective are transferred into missing persons. During investigating a missing woman they discover links to one of his old undercover cases and a cover up by his former handler.

by CraigDGriffiths · Overlord · 12,600 pts 0 views

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I am still “dot pointing” this story. I know the look and feel. I know that the undercover guy wants to go back to UC. But he can’t. He is PTSD on legs. I also know that when they start to find the connection to his old case, he has a hard time believing it. He even, engages in corrupt behaviour thinking he is protect UC. This is how it ends. He has to throw himself on his sword. He realises that his old ways broke him. That he wasn’t valuable to them. He was something to be used and discarded.

The story also shows that the system that broke him will also punish him to protect itself. He has an underlying fear of having to pay for things he did when he was young.

Pile on. All comments and questions will not only help the logline, but may trigger ideas. Thanks Craig

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CraigDGriffiths · Overlord · 12,600 pts

Thanks.

“Joins” for me is the outcome not the trigger. Regardless of him being sent there, requesting a transfer or as a promotion, he joined them. Word choice. I’ll try to find something better.

The stakes are his struggles. He is perhaps suicidal (the writing will tell me. But I could believe it). He wants to get back to undercover, but that ship has sailed, which he can’t accept. It is a struggle with identity, purpose and self worth (betrayal). As the investigation unfolds, he sees that his ex-supervisor (which is involved) is willing to sell him out, betray him.

At some level it is his life at stake. Not a binary “win/lose” goal. I know that makes it more difficult to visualise.

Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

>>>Torn between loyalty to his undercover past and doing the right thing a broken ex-uncover cop joins missing persons.

Law enforcement is a top-down, quasi-military institution. Cops can't join a particular unit or task force simply because they want to. They have to request to work in a unit or task force. Where they work is up to people who outrank them.

And the dilemma he faces would be between loyalty to his undercover *partners* or loyalty to his oath. Which is a very real, not uncommon dilemma cops face because of the strong bonds that form among officers, bonds formed by life-or-death situations. You depend on your partner to cover your back .

And it's still unclear what the dramatic problem is, what is at stake. The cover up could be about a 101 different crimes. Which one is it?

CraigDGriffiths · Overlord · 12,600 pts

Torn between loyalty to his undercover past and doing the right thing a broken ex-uncover cop joins missing persons. During his investigation he discovers a link to an undercover operation he was involved in and a cover up by his old supervisor.