“On his first day at Walmart, an ex-marine with PTSD must save his sister after eco-terrorists seize the store and take hostages.

Nice comment dpg.

One of the idea's I had was, the main bad guy just wants money but he recruited true believers who actually have problems with Walmart. (He's going to leave them holding the bag while he escapes)

Over the course of the movie the Walmart employee's and the "True Believers" holding them hostage will come to an understanding of one another.

As for the main character, that PTSD idea is terrific. Obviously he/she has to overcome that.

What's your final subjective payoff, Richiev? If the ex-marine finds the personal power -- the courage and wits -- to rescue everyone, can (s)he go back to a dis-empowering day job like that?

What attracts me to your story is it's potential to tap into the prevailing socio-economic malaise. Which is not just that the 99% are working harder to earn less, but that they also fell powerless to do anything about it. (But then I tend to over philosophize on plot themes.)

What's your final subjective payoff, Richiev? If the ex-marine finds the personal power -- the courage and wits -- to rescue everyone, can (s)he go back to a dis-empowering day job like that?

What attracts me to your story is it's potential to tap into the prevailing socio-economic malaise. Which is not just that the 99% are working harder to earn less, but that they also fell powerless to do anything about it. (But then I tend to over philosophize on plot themes.)