possible rom-com title “sunburn”

by variable · Maestro · 6,820 pts 447 views

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logline: “an insomniac girl falls in an unlikely friendship with the reluctant night watchman only to discover he is a vampire”

hey you know, you should get out, enjoy the sun…
…Oh wait, you can’t
(from Book “By the Light of the Moon”)

..so the goal i had in mind for them was to adjust their lives for the sake of one other, like:
For him to convince his bloodsucking family to back off. For her to convince her family to stop their demands to meet the boy.

I am confused who is the protagonist
I am confused of the film category (on the whole spectrum of rom-com, more romance or comedy)
Also, can somebody suggest a unique goal (this one sounds like twilight series)
Thanks

4 reviews

Richiev · Oracle · 58,825 pts ★ Accepted

You haven't given us any clear conflict, adding that to the logline will help improve it.

Former member · 114,968 pts

It' s an interesting idea, but as Richiev notes,? it needs a clear conflict.? What dramatic problem is created by this situation?? What conflict, what struggle ensues as a result of the relationship?

And as Brandon8719 asked, what is the hook that differentiates this from the "Twilight" series with which it will be immediately compared?

dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts

It' s an interesting idea, but as Richiev notes,? it needs a clear conflict.? What dramatic problem is created by this situation?? What conflict, what struggle ensues as a result of the relationship?

And as Brandon8719 asked, what is the hook that differentiates this from the "Twilight" series with which it will be immediately compared?

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