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Try starting off with the line After escaping??. Good one
Try starting off with the line "After escaping...". You should try to start loglines with active words, like "after", "when", "as", etc. I personally never include the genre in the logline either, because a well-done logline shuld automatically tell you the genre. Avoid repeating words, too. "Sex" is mentioned twice, and implied three other times.
With that in mind...
"After escaping a psychological detox camp, two lost and horny sex addicts must rely on each other to survive the elements, while controlling their voracious- but dangerous- cravings for intimacy."
It's not the best (it's not funny enough, really), but hopefully you get the idea. I'd work on ratcheting up the irony of the situation. As a concept, I think it has potential. Good job!
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