“Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything?”

Here are the log lines that have been presented so far. Any suggestions as to what looks good or should be changed in any way?

Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything??

While sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division is pulled into a deadly psychological war by her manipulative and vengeful ex-husband for sending him to prison.?

When her vengeful ex threatens his ex-wife by destroying the U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear sub by using a computer virus, the head of the Navy's PsyOps must convince him to give up before the submarine goes down.?

When the head of the U.S. Navy Psy Ops division discovers her vengeful ex has planted a bomb on a Submarine she must (insert what she MUST do, in essence, her GOAL?), before (insert worst case scenario?the STAKES) happens??

When her vengeful ex threatens to blow-up a U.S. nuclear sub using a computer virus, the head of the Navy's PsyOps must convince him to give up the virus code before California goes up in smoke.?

A routine evaluation of a new submarine's crew by the head of the U.S. DoD PsyOps turns into a crisis threatening to sink the sub with all aboard when her vengeful ex-husband infects the computer systems with a virus.?

Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board. Will this deadly psychological war destroy everything??

While sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division is pulled into a deadly psychological war by her manipulative and vengeful ex-husband for sending him to prison.?

When her vengeful ex threatens his ex-wife by destroying the U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear sub by using a computer virus, the head of the Navy's PsyOps must convince him to give up before the submarine goes down.?

When the head of the U.S. Navy Psy Ops division discovers her vengeful ex has planted a bomb on a Submarine she must (insert what she MUST do, in essence, her GOAL?), before (insert worst case scenario?the STAKES) happens??

When her vengeful ex threatens to blow-up a U.S. nuclear sub using a computer virus, the head of the Navy's PsyOps must convince him to give up the virus code before California goes up in smoke.?

A routine evaluation of a new submarine's crew by the head of the U.S. DoD PsyOps turns into a crisis threatening to sink the sub with all aboard when her vengeful ex-husband infects the computer systems with a virus.?

Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. state-of-the-art nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division discovers her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus to destroy her while on board.?

Sent to evaluate the crew and staff of a new U.S. Navy nuclear submarine during its trial runs, the head of the U. S. DoD PsyOps Division learns her vengeful ex husband has planted a computer virus.?

Locked in a nuclear submarine with the crew she was sent to evaluate, the Director of PsyOps must help stop the self-destruct sequence initiated by her vengeful husband.?

I recently sent an e-mail to the real NCIS to get their ideas on the situation. I am waiting for their response.

I understand that you would like to see your script as a NCIS episode. Personally I see more potential in the premise as a stand alone movie.
Think a mix of Crimson Tide, Speed and Die Hard with a vengeance.
Bar a coffin or the trunck of a car, you are unlikely to find more claustrophobic and confined settings than a submarine.

The movies 12 rounds (1 and 2) are exactly based on the concept that an all seeing vengeful antagonist makes the protagonist run through challenges. To win the protagonist has to outsmart and/or outfight him.
All you need is to write increasingly difficult challenges:

+ Make them run through the submarine just to find an object
+ cut their ability to communicate across the submarine so they have to use runners (physical/visual better than talky walky)
+ Solve a riddle to find the next clue.
+ Somebody sacrifies himself.
+ Cut their air supply.

Hope all those ideas help with your script. Let me know when you finishes it.