“Set in a futuristic world where humans are controlled by their fascist government, a career criminal gets drawn into a deadly plot when he rescues a upper class woman from the secret police and has to depend on her to survive.”

It sounds more like the woman is your real protagonist. She does more...

The logline keeps morphing such that I'm not sure what the kernel of the idea really is. Whatever, I suggest raising the stakes for the man: it's not a matter of just locating his daughter, it's also matter of also saving her life before...?

The logline keeps morphing such that I'm not sure what the kernel of the idea really is. Whatever, I suggest raising the stakes for the man: it's not a matter of just locating his daughter, it's also matter of also saving her life before...?

dpg: thx for the notes.

In a Fascist future, a career criminal gets contacted by a swanky woman who needs his skillset to take over power of the government, and offers him the location of his lost daughter if he helps her.

What's her motive for wanting to take down a system in which she seems to be doing quite well? She's a member of the upper class; what's her skin in the game?

Who's the protagonist: the criminal or the woman?

What's her motive for wanting to take down a system in which she seems to be doing quite well? She's a member of the upper class; what's her skin in the game?

Who's the protagonist: the criminal or the woman?