The most legendary and recognizable singing slave in al-Andalus hires an adventuring Norman to steal the Caliph’s prize possession, herself.

I am left wondering 'Why'. ?What is the slave wanting to achieve?

Sounds like an interesting start, but I am unsure of what the story is.

Only if??this logline is targeted to a Muslim production company ?is it likely that a reader will understand that al-Andalus refers to the historical period ?of the Muslim domination of ?Spain. ?That the risk for the 'adventurous Norman' is enhanced by his status as a ?'kafir' -- a ?non-believer [a rival Catholic].

The logline has the ingredients for plenty of conflict and jeopardy, but it would benefit from a clearer statement of when and where the story takes place.

Who is the main character, the singing slave or the Norman?

And what's her motivation for wanting to stage a kidnapping? ? Yes, she's a slave, so one would deduce she wants her freedom. ?But ?the story would benefit from a stronger motivation, a sense of urgency. Why does she NEED to be kidnapped NOW? Could it be that a deadline is approaching for a loveless marriage? Or that she has been compelled to become?a ?sex slave, a concubine to a cruel master?

Only if??this logline is targeted to a Muslim production company ?is it likely that a reader will understand that al-Andalus refers to the historical period ?of the Muslim domination of ?Spain. ?That the risk for the 'adventurous Norman' is enhanced by his status as a ?'kafir' -- a ?non-believer [a rival Catholic].

The logline has the ingredients for plenty of conflict and jeopardy, but it would benefit from a clearer statement of when and where the story takes place.

Who is the main character, the singing slave or the Norman?

And what's her motivation for wanting to stage a kidnapping? ? Yes, she's a slave, so one would deduce she wants her freedom. ?But ?the story would benefit from a stronger motivation, a sense of urgency. Why does she NEED to be kidnapped NOW? Could it be that a deadline is approaching for a loveless marriage? Or that she has been compelled to become?a ?sex slave, a concubine to a cruel master?