The true story of how a notorious Jewish counterfeiter saved his life by cooperating with the Nazis in the largest counterfeiting scheme in history.

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Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts ★ Accepted

I dunno...

Being put in a concentration camp is a VERY BIG event in one's life, especially for a Jew during the Third Reich.

I and millions of other people would find the act of being thrown into a concentration camp mighty hooky. If you don't specify this, you undermine its importance when compared to the other story elements - not only are you coming across as callous with respect to the subject matter at hand but also you're neglecting to specify the immense obstacle the MC faces - why do that? Obstacles and stakes make a story interesting, even if they're obvious parts of a story you'd do best to mention them in the logline.

Not many Jews made it out alive, a true story about a Jew who did, regardless the method, is interesting. Needless to say, this guy's particular story has its own twist on Holocaust survival and as a result an amplified interest in the story. That's why the logline would read better if you mentioned what he did, why and under what specific circumstance.

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After being thrown into a concentration camp, a notorious Jewish counterfeiter saved his life by cooperating with the Nazis in the largest counterfeiting scheme in history.

Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

>>>>The true story of how a Jewish counterfeiter trades his services for freedom from the Nazi war machine.

Except it's not a trade in terms that he's free to walk away from the scheme.? He has no choice:? It's help the Nazi's or go to the gas chambers.? It's do or die.? And freedom is not an option as a carrot dangled out in front of him..? The best he can hope for is to? merely survival from one day to the next -- for as long as the Nazis need his skills.

Of course, he does gain (not win) his freedom.? Thanks to the Allies defeating Germany, not because of Nazis beneficence.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

>>>>The true story of how a Jewish counterfeiter trades his services for freedom from the Nazi war machine.

Except it's not a trade in terms that he's free to walk away from the scheme.? He has no choice:? It's help the Nazi's or go to the gas chambers.? It's do or die.? And freedom is not an option as a carrot dangled out in front of him..? The best he can hope for is to? merely survival from one day to the next -- for as long as the Nazis need his skills.

Of course, he does gain (not win) his freedom.? Thanks to the Allies defeating Germany, not because of Nazis beneficence.