When a broke musician is accidentally locked in a wine cellar with a rich beautiful socialite, he desperately attempts to woo her (and her wealth) before somebody comes to their rescue.

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Former member · Singularity · 114,968 pts

While an impoverished musician and a rich socialite are accidentally and briefly trapped a wine cellar, he stokes his courage with wine in order to ask her for a date.
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Or some such.? My point is that if you're going to trap them in a wine cellar, then use the situation in the logline (and plot), use the booze.? Otherwise the wine cellar is a throw away, a? wasted opportunity for comedy. Might as well trap them in a malfunctioning elevator instead.

I'm invoking a dramatic principle on that point known as "Chekhov's Gun".? It's named after the great Russian dramatist Anton Chekhov, who stated that "If in the first act you have hung a pistol on the wall, then in the following one it should be fired.? Otherwise don't put it there."

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dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

While an impoverished musician and a rich socialite are accidentally and briefly trapped a wine cellar, he stokes his courage with wine in order to ask her for a date.
(30 words)

Or some such.? My point is that if you're going to trap them in a wine cellar, then use the situation in the logline (and plot), use the booze.? Otherwise the wine cellar is a throw away, a? wasted opportunity for comedy. Might as well trap them in a malfunctioning elevator instead.

I'm invoking a dramatic principle on that point known as "Chekhov's Gun".? It's named after the great Russian dramatist Anton Chekhov, who stated that "If in the first act you have hung a pistol on the wall, then in the following one it should be fired.? Otherwise don't put it there."

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Jessie · Samurai · 1,135 pts

I'd find it a nice extra touch if there was immediacy to his problem. Maybe, not only is he broke, but...? He'll be kicked out of his house tomorrow? A huge debt is about to be collected? His band is about to split up, unless he can fork over some money? Just some thoughts for extra spice.