Through various interactions with old friends and family at her mom’s funeral, a bitter, middle-aged woman learns that she may have been the most important thing in her mom’s life – even though they haven’t spoken in twenty years.
Categories: Drama
4 reviews
Agreed with Richiev, the first sentence in your logline describes a moment best left for act 3 or end of act 2 - a powerful moment with a potent meaning in which the audience learns through a visual that the MC realises she was wrong all along. Ergo she learns to be a better person and only after that happens she is allowed to achieve her outer goal be it re kindling a lost love or making piece with her own daughter.
As Richiev said.
Although I think?the discovery about her mother could come?earlier IF it's the inciting incident for some objective goal she must accomplish as a result of the discovery.? But I can't tell from the logline whether it's something she learns at the start of the?story -- or the end.
If it's what she discovers at the end of the story -- then yes, it's a spoiler.? A logline should never give away?the ?ending.
As Richiev said.
Although I think?the discovery about her mother could come?earlier IF it's the inciting incident for some objective goal she must accomplish as a result of the discovery.? But I can't tell from the logline whether it's something she learns at the start of the?story -- or the end.
If it's what she discovers at the end of the story -- then yes, it's a spoiler.? A logline should never give away?the ?ending.