VERSION A: “Consumed by fear of his impending mortality, a 31-year-old man race against time to break an ancient curse that kills all males in his lineage by age 32.” VERSION B: “A 31-year-old man races against time to break an ancient curse that kills all males in his lineage by age 32.”

by Sylia Gray · Penpusher · 195 pts 366 views

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jacksparrow · Penpusher · 105 pts

"A man must break an ancient curse within a year if he and his lineage want to live beyond the age 32."

CraigDGriffiths · Overlord · 12,600 pts

I like version B. If you knew you are dying fear is an obvious outcome. Add in an emotion if you can use it to subvert the audience expectations. For example ?turned on by death ..?

Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

Or, to throw another option out there.
In Korea, your birthday is considered the date of conception, not birth.
What if his brother moved to Korea and dies, then upon further investigation the MC discovers the curse.
Now the hero has nine months to break it.