A single mother wakes up one morning having forgotten the past 16 years and the circumstances of her husband’s disappearance. While she tries to find him, a vengeful cop implicates her for a murder.
Categories: Thriller
8 reviews
The latest draft of the logline is a bit more streamlined in terms of events, but still lacks a compelling motivation and clear goal.
The fact she can't remember the father's identity is really no biggie. What's the worst that will happen should she fail to find the father? Equally what's the best that would happen if she does find the father? What does she stand to gain? Not much...
What will she do once she finds the father? What is the purpose of her search outside of identifying him?
Her stakes are low and goal unclear.
Lastly "...a vengeful cop..." is a vague description of a bad guy - vengeful about what? The whole murder investigation feels like a 'tacked on' plot point and unrelated to the story. Either make her struggling to prove her innocence in the murder investigation the A plot or drop it altogether.
?I'm well aware of amnesia induced by physical trauma, but for someone to wake up one morning and for no apparent reason forget a specific interval of her life, 16 and only 16 years - well, can that actually happen? ?It would certainly be a rare event, but is it a medically plausible one?
Modern audiences -- and movie critics -- are more sophisticated about these matters ?or can be become so by merely googling. ?So the initial amnesia has got to hold up under scrutiny as medically plausible. ?Just saying.
?I'm well aware of amnesia induced by physical trauma, but for someone to wake up one morning and for no apparent reason forget a specific interval of her life, 16 and only 16 years - well, can that actually happen? ?It would certainly be a rare event, but is it a medically plausible one?
Modern audiences -- and movie critics -- are more sophisticated about these matters ?or can be become so by merely googling. ?So the initial amnesia has got to hold up under scrutiny as medically plausible. ?Just saying.