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The objective goal is to solve the murder. ?The strained relationship is a complicating factor; they must resolve that complication to achieve their objective goal.
As originally written, the logline is a plot with co-protagonists who come with an array of ingredients for a spicy ?gumbo of a working relationship: ?white vs black, female versus male, ambitious rookie versus seasoned veteran. ?More ingredients, perhaps, than can be crammed into a concise logline.
The question I ask myself is : which of the two has the stronger, longer character arc? ? Who has the most to overcome externally and grow internally to achieve the objective goal? ?Whoever it is, perhaps, ought to be the primary protagonist.
I'm inclined to tag the veteran Black detective as a mentor character. He may not be perfect, but he is clearly more experienced and has acquired more street smarts. ?The female detective needs him more than he needs her. ?In fact, initially he probably would ?think he?doesn't?needs her at all -- doesn't want her at all because she brings more liabilities than assets to the partnership.
Her task, then, in terms of their relationship is to prove she's a worthy partner as she pursues the objective goal. ?So I'm inclined to suggest refocusing the logline around the female detective.
fwiw
The objective goal is to solve the murder. ?The strained relationship is a complicating factor; they must resolve that complication to achieve their objective goal.
As originally written, the logline is a plot with co-protagonists who come with an array of ingredients for a spicy ?gumbo of a working relationship: ?white vs black, female versus male, ambitious rookie versus seasoned veteran. ?More ingredients, perhaps, than can be crammed into a concise logline.
The question I ask myself is : which of the two has the stronger, longer character arc? ? Who has the most to overcome externally and grow internally to achieve the objective goal? ?Whoever it is, perhaps, ought to be the primary protagonist.
I'm inclined to tag the veteran Black detective as a mentor character. He may not be perfect, but he is clearly more experienced and has acquired more street smarts. ?The female detective needs him more than he needs her. ?In fact, initially he probably would ?think he?doesn't?needs her at all -- doesn't want her at all because she brings more liabilities than assets to the partnership.
Her task, then, in terms of their relationship is to prove she's a worthy partner as she pursues the objective goal. ?So I'm inclined to suggest refocusing the logline around the female detective.
fwiw
In 1990's New Orleans, an experienced, rule following black cop and an impulsive rookie must work together to bring the killer of a black teenager to justice before the riots it caused tear the city apart. (36)
In 1990's New Orleans, when the murder of ?black teenager causes riots,?an experienced black cop must work with an impulsive, stubborn rookie to find the killer before the city is torn apart. (33)
The focus of the logline should be on the relationship that is front in center, the mixed gender buddy cop type relationship. I couldn't think of a good word for 'rule following' at the moment, but in both versions I tried to highlight the differences which cause the obstacle to their work.
Hope this helps.