When a man wakes up in an unfamiliar bar with no memories, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider his own relationship with death.

Does refer to the movie already made.

"When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament."

>>>Consider his relationship with? death?

Vague, needs clarity. Specifically, what does that mean in terms of what he must do?

And a plot is organized around one prime objective goal.? Not two.? Just one.? A logline is about the struggle to achieve that one goal. All other goals are secondary and subordinate to the prime goal -- and extraneous to a loglne.

So what is his singular primary goal: solve the mystery or "consider his relationship with death" (whatever that means)?

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And does this refer to a movie already made?? Because that's what? "examples" are for.

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>>>Consider his relationship with? death?

Vague, needs clarity. Specifically, what does that mean in terms of what he must do?

And a plot is organized around one prime objective goal.? Not two.? Just one.? A logline is about the struggle to achieve that one goal. All other goals are secondary and subordinate to the prime goal -- and extraneous to a loglne.

So what is his singular primary goal: solve the mystery or "consider his relationship with death" (whatever that means)?

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And does this refer to a movie already made?? Because that's what? "examples" are for.

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When a man wakes up in world where people communicate through a game of Rock, Paper, Scissors, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider?his relationship with death.

A couple of thoughts I hope are useful:

• Do you need 'unfamiliar' bar if he's lost his memory?
• 'his own relationship with death' sounds like the emphasis is on 'own' - if so, why? Who else is there? And how does getting his memory back relate to his mortality?