When a move to a new town and a stronger prescription fails to keep her dreams from altering her waking life, an overwrought teenager must learn to accept her bizarre talent and stop a provocateur from exploiting her power to manipulate an unwitting public.

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Former member · Legend · 114,968 pts

As others have said. The logline is hiding the game ball -- the nature of "bizarre talent" (related it appears to her dreams) on which the whole plot pivots.

dogger · Legend · 87,055 pts

As others have said. The logline is hiding the game ball -- the nature of "bizarre talent" (related it appears to her dreams) on which the whole plot pivots.

Neer Shelter · Legend · 39,985 pts

Good points raised above the concept may be great but I am unable to discern what it is from the logline.

Perhaps consider a re draft that mentions only the MC her inciting incident and goal then it would be possible to see what back ground and character descriptions add to the concept and which confuse it.

Hope this helps.