When a star-struck young buck is forced to hide out in an off-grid commune to evade the police, using the identity he constructed to attain his anonymity allows him to win over the group, who decides to make him their new leader, even after he confesses to a past crime.

by Roberto Alto · Mentor · 535 pts September 3, 2017 527 views

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dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts September 4, 2017 ★ Accepted

And then what?

What is the specific dramatic problem created by this sequence of events?

As a result, what must he do about the problem? ?IOW: what becomes his objective goal?

Who opposes him? ?Who is his nemesis?

What I see is a chain of events. ?What I don't see (yet) is a chain of causation that creates a plot.

Neer Shelter · Script Doctor · 40,115 pts September 5, 2017

Agreed with DPG.

Also, what does "...star-struck young buck..." mean?

Foxtrot25 · Maestro · 8,420 pts September 4, 2017

Also, we are way too long at this point as well. Shorten.

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