This could be a cool fantasy/adventure film! It seems like a family film peppered with darker moments. From reading certain words ("time-space", "warped"), I thought your story was science-fiction, until I saw that you've listed it fantasy. I like the descriptor for your MC. "Time-space" sounds awkward to me. If I'm not mistaken, it's called space-time, or you could say time and space. "The very first tears of her lifetime" is too wordy. Instead, you could write: her first tears. "Her ability", you should specify what her ability is. "Mysterious man", I think your antagonist needs a stronger descriptor.