When an elf and a dwarf of noble decent fall in love they struggle with their secret while battling the prejudices of their races as well as an ongoing war against a foe that seeks only to destroy their peoples.

You're welcome! Yes, the logline can definitely be a challenge, but I feel the gist of your story has great potential. Best of success!

Thanks for the feedback! It's kind of a complicated story. The fact that these two have a romantic relationship has a huge impact on the ongoing war that's taking place when the story begins, and causes a huge turn of events and change in upcoming battles against the enemy. So trying to think of a logline for it has been a little nerve-racking

I think you need to be ruthless with your story for the sake of the logline, and tell us who the protagonist is going to be, and what their goal is through the story. At the moment there are two different protagonists (which makes for an unfocused logline), and two different goals (which makes it difficult to picture what sort of film this is likely to be.)

If the focus is "magical races as allegory for interracial marriage", then we need to know what the protagonist is doing to overcome the prejudices, as well as what the stakes of failure to do so are.

If the focus is the battle, and love story is secondary, or a backdrop to it, then you need to be clearer on the goal and stakes of that side of the story.

Hi!

I am not too sure as to how to respond to a logline, so my apologies if my response is deemed inappropriate.

The core of your idea is very appealing, as it conjures up imagery of a wonderful, magical love story that could be either live-action or animated.

I do feel your logline needs to be streamlined, as some of the details you have may be unnecessary (in my opinion) and only clutter the core idea down.

Here is my edit of your logline, only to be taken as a suggestion (but feel free to use) to your wonderful idea that I think will do really well.

"When an Elf and a Dwarf secretly fall in love, they struggle with the battling prejudices of their two races, as well as a Giant that has come to destroy them all."

By introducing a Giant into your story further along (midpoint, I'd say as a guess), I feel you are creating a new obstacle that ups the stakes of your two main characters who must rally the elves and dwarves together to set their differences aside to defeat their new foe.

Your story immediately brings to mind an interesting new take as a "Romeo & Juliet" meets "The Hobbit" kind of story.

I wish you all the best on success of your idea, as I feel it is truly a compelling, marketable idea.

Grant