When her reclusive father dies without a will, his washed-up rodeo queen daughter must gather her estranged siblings in order to settle his estate.
Categories: Drama
17 reviews
It's still not clear what specifically they need to do. What is their goal and what will their main action be?
"...they have one shot of avoiding foreclosure," - what does this mean in practical terms?
Also, "...changing their dubious reputations..." is vague and seems redundant to the plot - you can simply cut it.
Maybe this one drills down a bit more:
When a former rodeo queen and her ex-con?brother inherit their father's struggling farm,?they have one shot of avoiding foreclosure, and changing their dubious reputations for the better.
I like it. What about this:
When a former rodeo queen and her ex-con?brother inherit their father's struggling farm, they have one?chance to make it a success, ?and one to?turn around their failed lives.
Why not just have both of them inherit the ranch? ?(IOW: there is a will.) ?And they're an "Odd Couple", they never got along a siblings? ?And misfits who are life failures?
Now they must figure out a way to work together as business partners. Because the dramatic problem is not that their father's ranch has been left intestate. ?Rather the dramatic problem is that the father bequeathed them a failing operation, saddled with debt. ?So they can just cash out and sell the operation, take the money and run. They have until October 31, the end of the crop and cattle season, to turn it around or else the bank will foreclose.
The stakes are that it's the last chance for both of them to turn around their failed lives.
fwiw
Why not just have both of them inherit the ranch? ?(IOW: there is a will.) ?And they're an "Odd Couple", they never got along a siblings? ?And misfits who are life failures?
Now they must figure out a way to work together as business partners. Because the dramatic problem is not that their father's ranch has been left intestate. ?Rather the dramatic problem is that the father bequeathed them a failing operation, saddled with debt. ?So they can just cash out and sell the operation, take the money and run. They have until October 31, the end of the crop and cattle season, to turn it around or else the bank will foreclose.
The stakes are that it's the last chance for both of them to turn around their failed lives.
fwiw
...and he is the antagonist. There's not a puddle he can't step in, he can't live life straight. He wants to belong but he's just not wired that way.