When his son dies, a distraught and vengeful dad must accept that the death was an accident and not a murder.

>>>>must accept that the death was an accident and not a murder.

Seems to be a spoiler giving away the solution to the mystery: ?was it an accident or a crime covered up to appear as an accident? ?And a logline should never contain a spoiler, give away the Big Reveal or the ending.

The logline needs to be framed in terms of the father's initial (end of Act 1) objective goal, not his final (Act 3) realization.

And btw: ?the best plots are torture racks designed to make the protagonist suffer, to force them into confessing a ?secret truth about themselves. ?Ergo, in struggling to discover the truth about his son's death (objective goal), the father should be forced to realize and confess an unpleasant truth about himself (subjective need).

Again, "Ordinary People" is a model movie of a family on the torture rack after the accidental death of a beloved family member.

fwiw

>>>>must accept that the death was an accident and not a murder.

Seems to be a spoiler giving away the solution to the mystery: ?was it an accident or a crime covered up to appear as an accident? ?And a logline should never contain a spoiler, give away the Big Reveal or the ending.

The logline needs to be framed in terms of the father's initial (end of Act 1) objective goal, not his final (Act 3) realization.

And btw: ?the best plots are torture racks designed to make the protagonist suffer, to force them into confessing a ?secret truth about themselves. ?Ergo, in struggling to discover the truth about his son's death (objective goal), the father should be forced to realize and confess an unpleasant truth about himself (subjective need).

Again, "Ordinary People" is a model movie of a family on the torture rack after the accidental death of a beloved family member.

fwiw

Agreed with DPG.

Ciaran,
Welcome aboard.

Please read the 'Formula' tab up top for more information about logline conventions.

Also, please read the 'Rules' section. I moderated your posts by deleting the loglines that had the least number of comments from other users. Please refrain from blanket covering the first few pages with your concepts and stick to the community guideline of 2 reviews for each logline you post. This way other people can benefit from your thoughts on their loglines and have the opportunity to have their loglines in the top spots of the first few pages.

Nir.