When his wife dies giving birth to her rapist’s child, a recovering alcoholic chooses to raise the baby alone to resolve his scorn.

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Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

Seeing as this is a film, the story needs to be defined better. Dramatic potential aside, you must have a starting point and an end point.

Considering the original logline, the inciting incident is his wife's death. This then throws his world off-kilter and he makes the choice to raise the child - end act one.
What happens now for the duration of act 2? And what MUST he achieve by the end of act 3?

I believe a good choice would be to make him not only raise, and keep safe the child, but also find and punish the rapist. Once he achieves that the audience knows that the MC made a tough choice and restored justice to his world.

Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

Yes, this is a good story idea. ?Lots of opportunity for dramatic conflict and there will be instant sympathy for the man for doing the right thing, stepping up to the challenge. ?However, I ?suggest it needs a little polishing.

Is the child a boy or girl? ?That needs to be specified in the logline because the nature of the relationship and twists and turns in the story are contingent on the sex of the infant.

And rather than than "to resolve his scorn" I suggest he does what he has to do, raise the child because that is what?he believes he must do ?-- in spite of his feelings. ?IOW: he is his own antagonist. ?His negative feelings could not only destroy the relationship with the child but destroy the man by triggering a relapse into drinking.

This really does have the makings for a compelling story. ?Good luck with your writing.

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dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Yes, this is a good story idea. ?Lots of opportunity for dramatic conflict and there will be instant sympathy for the man for doing the right thing, stepping up to the challenge. ?However, I ?suggest it needs a little polishing.

Is the child a boy or girl? ?That needs to be specified in the logline because the nature of the relationship and twists and turns in the story are contingent on the sex of the infant.

And rather than than "to resolve his scorn" I suggest he does what he has to do, raise the child because that is what?he believes he must do ?-- in spite of his feelings. ?IOW: he is his own antagonist. ?His negative feelings could not only destroy the relationship with the child but destroy the man by triggering a relapse into drinking.

This really does have the makings for a compelling story. ?Good luck with your writing.

fwiw