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I get it that a young band would have a passion for and would want to revive interest in Go-Go music.? But I don't understand why they "must".? That the diversity mix of a city is changing is not a problem, a dramatic crisis that demands a remedy -- it's urban life.?? So why does it matter whether Go-Go is popular -- or pass??? What are the stakes that an audience can identify with and buy into?
That said, while the logline has a specific inciting incident, an historical musical venue closes, it lacks a specific objective goal.? "Must help bring the spirit of Go-Go music to the forefront" is vague,? a generality.? What is their game plan, their specific objective goal for reviving interest in Go-Go music?
I think you have buried the story a bit, and why must they?
Hoping to save GoGo music and their livelihoods a young band must .... in a hope of bring back the musics popularity in an increasingly gentrified city.
I get it that a young band would have a passion for and would want to revive interest in Go-Go music.? But I don't understand why they "must".? That the diversity mix of a city is changing is not a problem, a dramatic crisis that demands a remedy -- it's urban life.?? So why does it matter whether Go-Go is popular -- or pass??? What are the stakes that an audience can identify with and buy into?
That said, while the logline has a specific inciting incident, an historical musical venue closes, it lacks a specific objective goal.? "Must help bring the spirit of Go-Go music to the forefront" is vague,? a generality.? What is their game plan, their specific objective goal for reviving interest in Go-Go music?