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You need a face to the bad guy.
In order to better visualize the dance instructor, it might help to add an adjective or two (like naive, ambitious, impoverished, etc). The corruption/betrayal angle is intriguing, but a bit generic. Maybe something more specific (like a student who accuses him of sexual abuse in order to attract the attention of someone else that leads to instructor going to jail/bankrupting him. Maybe a male student accuses him and the instructor is homophobic).
Very cool, but what does the protag do with the “discovery?”
Example:
Immigrating to the US to teach dance to wealthy students, a famous Hungarian ballroom instructor must overcome the corruption and betrayal between him and the fast-fading American Dream.
Keep going!