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you used 'wrong' twice. that's wrong. :) it's vague. tighten it up. identify.
This is a concept, not a logline. As andrewclau says above, you haven't identified any of the important points that would allow us to understand your story - the most important of which is surely a protagonist (the who) and a clearly stated objective goal ("to fight what they feel is wrong" is WAY too vague. What does that look like on the screen? How will I as a potential investor in your product be able to tell whether your hero has or hasn't achieved their goal?)
LoglinesRUS - I'm confused by your logline. First of all, it's really long at 45 words. Can you clarify what the inciting incident is? Who is the main protagonist of your story? You refer to a small band of hackers but is there a leader? What is it they are fighting that is "wrong?" What are the stakes? What will happen if the terrorist threat is not stopped?
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