The Event would be.........When the crime rate explodes across Los Angeles.
The Goal is unclear.
The Premise is a bit vague......Era's clash.
I like the mentor is he a shape changer also being the antagonist......That could be good.
Use words sparingly Because you need to hit the 5 Point Logliners Code.
Try when
A struggling rookie D A starts winning cases with the help of a former dead judge he becomes a willing subject, but when it is revealed that the devil is manipulating history he must win his most important case.
A greater threat with a High Concept attached to a more personal Goal.
Hope this broadens your scope.