1. Posted: September 7, 2012In:

    Cop by day/wolf by full moon. When werewolf police detective Joshua Hobbel is framed for murder, he must accept the beast within in order to stop the human monsters that surround him.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Change the word "control" to "accept" A werewolf can't control his curse.

    Change the word “control” to “accept” A werewolf can’t control his curse.

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    Cop by day/wolf by full moon. When werewolf police detective Joshua Hobbel is framed for murder, he must accept the beast within in order to stop the human monsters that surround him.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    I assume the cop is already a werewolf and the i.i is the framed murder. Him being attacked would make a great i.i! But in doing so changes your story. Other than being framed how does this relate to the detective? If it's say the mayors daughter, or his wife? cheating ex wife? Makes it more of a hoRead more

    I assume the cop is already a werewolf and the i.i is the framed murder.
    Him being attacked would make a great i.i! But in doing so changes your story.
    Other than being framed how does this relate to the detective? If it’s say the mayors daughter, or his wife? cheating ex wife? Makes it more of a hook for the reader.

    I’m not that keen on the “cop by day/wolf by full moon” but it does explain his condition.(If already a werewolf)

    my spin…

    As a cursed detective struggles to control the wolf within, his faith in humanity is lost when he is framed for his wife’s murder.

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  3. Posted: September 7, 2012In:

    Cop by day/wolf by full moon. When werewolf police detective Joshua Hobbel is framed for murder, he must accept the beast within in order to stop the human monsters that surround him.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Hey Chas I'm a big fan of werewolf movies! Regarding your logline I'll make a few suggestions. *With loglines try to keep the word count from 27-25 words, one sentence. *Names are irrelevant, unless, of course, it?s relevant to the story. Same with age *The protag is a detective. How would you descrRead more

    Hey Chas

    I’m a big fan of werewolf movies! Regarding your logline I’ll make a few suggestions.

    *With loglines try to keep the word count from 27-25 words, one sentence.
    *Names are irrelevant, unless, of course, it?s relevant to the story. Same with age
    *The protag is a detective. How would you describe him, character-wise? Lonely, blind, obsessive-compulsive. A flaw that he needs to overcome in his journey. (his curse maybe?)
    *The human monsters that surround him sound a little vague, that could mean anything, pedophiles, murders, terrorist, rapist. Try to give the antagonist a face, or the obstacles more clearer.

    Best of luck.

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