1. Posted: July 3, 2013In:

    After reading a page from a spell book an incorrigible boy discovers a cursed princess trapped in a tree in his backyard. He must break the spell and save his father from his new girlfriend, the Witch.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    I believe by just saying "boy" implies that he is young of age. Thanks for the feedback.

    I believe by just saying “boy” implies that he is young of age.
    Thanks for the feedback.

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  2. Posted: June 26, 2013In:

    Determined and short of money, a young boy aims to swim and fly to his dream paradise on the wildest island of Tasmania.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    unfortunately it's easier to press a button for a negative than actually give a healthy criticism/feedback.

    unfortunately it’s easier to press a button for a negative than actually give a healthy criticism/feedback.

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  3. Posted: July 3, 2013In:

    A determined boy separated from his newfound sweetheart must cross the Bass Strait and come to the rescue before Tasmania is destroyed by rising sea levels.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Does our hero have a flaw? Fear of water? A personal obstacle etc. I like this revised version, nice work.

    Does our hero have a flaw? Fear of water? A personal obstacle etc.
    I like this revised version, nice work.

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