1. Posted: February 15, 2013In:

    When 13 year old Bob decide to handover certain family artifacts and heirlooms of over 300 years to the British National Museum, an ancient war resumes and to stop the war, Bob has to go into the past to right the wrongs made by his ancestors.

    blajay

    Thanks nicholasandrewhalls... Is it just me or it's easier to write a script than write a logline? :) I don't want to get sucked into a situation whereby progress is dependent on a logline. "A young boys quest to close a dark chapter of his lineage unwittingly opens up a whole new world of trouble fRead more

    Thanks nicholasandrewhalls…

    Is it just me or it’s easier to write a script than write a logline? 🙂

    I don’t want to get sucked into a situation whereby progress is dependent on a logline.

    “A young boys quest to close a dark chapter of his lineage unwittingly opens up a whole new world of trouble for him.”

    OR

    “A young boy’s quest to close a dark chapter of his lineage unwittingly rekindles an age long war which he struggles to stop.”

    As an aside, I came across this website which you might find useful –

    http://www.twoadverbs.com/logline.pdf

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  2. Posted: February 15, 2013In:

    When 13 year old Bob decide to handover certain family artifacts and heirlooms of over 300 years to the British National Museum, an ancient war resumes and to stop the war, Bob has to go into the past to right the wrongs made by his ancestors.

    blajay

    Thanks mmckean... the revision was just an attempt to reduce the length of the Logline. Bob is a descendant of a man who was a major player during the trans-atlantic slave trade. The artifacts were some personal belongings of some of the they took as slaves. Its the spirit of the slave masters and tRead more

    Thanks mmckean… the revision was just an attempt to reduce the length of the Logline. Bob is a descendant of a man who was a major player during the trans-atlantic slave trade. The artifacts were some personal belongings of some of the they took as slaves. Its the spirit of the slave masters and that of the slaves that resumes fighting… Bob believes he has to stop the war to save his own health

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  3. Posted: February 15, 2013In:

    An investigative journalist discovers the strangest story of his career after he stumbles on a mysterious mansion in the woods, guarded by the military.

    blajay

    How about this? A journalist low on his luck makes a discovery that that could save his career but ultimately end his life. With little time available to him, he has to decide which is worth saving.

    How about this? A journalist low on his luck makes a discovery that that could save his career but ultimately end his life. With little time available to him, he has to decide which is worth saving.

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