1. Posted: October 30, 2013In:

    A woman protected her whole life by what she believes to be her guardian angel must unravel the secrets behind her protector when it starts hurting the people closest to her.

    wlubake

    Thanks for the feedback! Really looking to test the concept here, as I am tentatively tagging this as my next project. I am definitely going a horror/thriller route with it.

    Thanks for the feedback! Really looking to test the concept here, as I am tentatively tagging this as my next project. I am definitely going a horror/thriller route with it.

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  2. Posted: October 30, 2013In:

    The last married man on Earth takes on all contenders to win back his kidnapped wife on a bloody, gladiatorial game show.

    wlubake

    This logline leaves me with a bunch of questions. Why is he the last married man on earth? Did people just stop getting married? Why is it important that he's the last married man on earth (it doesn't seem to have much to do with having to fight to get his wife back)? Why is she taken? Who are theseRead more

    This logline leaves me with a bunch of questions. Why is he the last married man on earth? Did people just stop getting married? Why is it important that he’s the last married man on earth (it doesn’t seem to have much to do with having to fight to get his wife back)? Why is she taken? Who are these guys he’s fighting? What makes him qualified to fight these challengers?

    If I had to guess, it sounds like the Running Man with his wife as the prize if he survives.

    I’d just focus on making the concept more cohesive. Leave out the details that confuse.

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  3. Posted: October 30, 2013In:

    ?A young lawyer?s world turns upside down when the woman he met as a freshman dies the day of their wedding. As a result, he must choose to live his current life which is a product of joint decisions or find the person he was just before he met her”

    wlubake

    Not necessarily conflicting. It just needs to relate to the story (or be omitted from the logline). So, for instance, John McClane is a New York cop. That doesn't conflict with the movie, rather it helps us understand why he has the skills to accomplish his goals. In contrast, a movie like Sister AcRead more

    Not necessarily conflicting. It just needs to relate to the story (or be omitted from the logline). So, for instance, John McClane is a New York cop. That doesn’t conflict with the movie, rather it helps us understand why he has the skills to accomplish his goals. In contrast, a movie like Sister Act, where our hustler protagonist is the last person who belongs in a convent. It just has to serve the story. Right now, I don’t see where a lawyer serves your story in any way.

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