1. Posted: January 27, 2013In:

    Nathan Carson receives an e-mail from the hotel staff regarding his indiscretion. When he offers to pay them, he learns it is not his money that will keep their silence.

    bryson

    Thanks for the feedback. I totally poorly executed what I know about creating a logline. Appreciate the reminder.

    Thanks for the feedback. I totally poorly executed what I know about creating a logline. Appreciate the reminder.

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  2. Posted: January 7, 2013In:

    While being pursued by police and a protection team, David Porter must find the legendary Tony Bill to pay off a gambling debt; or he's dead

    bryson

    RobbRoss thanks for your feedback. Certainly good comments to add along with the others. Currently working on a stronger logline.

    RobbRoss thanks for your feedback. Certainly good comments to add along with the others. Currently working on a stronger logline.

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  3. Posted: January 7, 2013In:

    A brutal assassin wins custody of his children, one of them can tell the future and they must use his gift to find a way to end their father's gruesome acts, or their life becomes endangered.

    bryson

    Not perfect but in my opinion you are not far from there with a few modifications. Are you going to make another submission?

    Not perfect but in my opinion you are not far from there with a few modifications. Are you going to make another submission?

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