1. Posted: January 7, 2013In:

    While being pursued by police and a protection team, David Porter must find the legendary Tony Bill to pay off a gambling debt; or he's dead

    bryson

    The protection team is for the Tony Bill which is an object. He is seeking it out to pay for his debt. I debated a long time over which logline to post (alternative below).....did I make the wrong choice? "A down on his luck lawyer, obsessed with virtual gambling, pursues the legendary Tony Bill toRead more

    The protection team is for the Tony Bill which is an object. He is seeking it out to pay for his debt.

    I debated a long time over which logline to post (alternative below)…..did I make the wrong choice?

    “A down on his luck lawyer, obsessed with virtual gambling, pursues the legendary Tony Bill to clear a debt and save his life”

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  2. Posted: January 5, 2013In:

    After wrongly being convicted of a crime, three hundred years in the future, a former elite soldier is sent to an experimental prison camp on a distant moon, only to be drawn into a violent conflict between an ancient civilization and his fellow prisoners.

    bryson

    Your story is certainly a good one. Some snips and cuts where the others have suggested would improve your logline.

    Your story is certainly a good one. Some snips and cuts where the others have suggested would improve your logline.

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  3. Posted: January 6, 2013In:

    When a 50-foot-tall Maine moose destroys forests and attacks people, biologist Dan Gellerston must confront dark secrets from his past to find a way to stop the monster.

    bryson

    I like the concept here. I agree with a name change assuming the genre of this is thriller, drama.

    I like the concept here. I agree with a name change assuming the genre of this is thriller, drama.

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