1. Posted: June 9, 2015In:

    In a future where criminals are punished with instant aging, when a young ex-convict -turned 70- learns about a place where his youth can be restored, he has a week to find it before the process becomes irreversible.

    Byron

    The interesting concept here is that you have an old man acting with the mannerisms, speech, etc of a young man...

    The interesting concept here is that you have an old man acting with the mannerisms, speech, etc of a young man…

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  2. Posted: June 11, 2015In:

    As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

    Byron

    Ah ha; that breakdown helps a lot. Thanks =) I have updated...I think I am getting closer. I was unsure if your comment suggested changing the beginning or not. Due to the title, Against the Fall, I thought to use "Civilization has fallen and..." Is my logic flawed there?

    Ah ha; that breakdown helps a lot. Thanks =)

    I have updated…I think I am getting closer. I was unsure if your comment suggested changing the beginning or not. Due to the title, Against the Fall, I thought to use “Civilization has fallen and…”

    Is my logic flawed there?

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  3. Posted: June 11, 2015In:

    As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.

    Byron

    Changed it, not sure if it answers all the questions?also not sure if I should edit the original, or add as a new post - edited the original.

    Changed it, not sure if it answers all the questions?also not sure if I should edit the original, or add as a new post – edited the original.

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