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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
I was so tempted to leave the post-apocalyptic part in, but the more I thought about it the more I saw your point. You don't have to give away all of the story in the logline, just as you said - sell the sizzle. Changed the character flaw to frightened, rather than troubled. Kept him as a young man.Read more
I was so tempted to leave the post-apocalyptic part in, but the more I thought about it the more I saw your point. You don’t have to give away all of the story in the logline, just as you said – sell the sizzle.
Changed the character flaw to frightened, rather than troubled. Kept him as a young man. Changed to what’s left of humanity to give a glimpse that something tragic has happened without spilling the beans.
Modified the time frame to “save the world”, while the story takes place over 15 days…this will likely shorten as I work on the treatment, I can modify in the logline if it needs to be less. The experiment spans many millennia.
The interesting thing is, I have another book I wrote that the logline would be much easier to write…I already have it running through my head based on what I have learned from this dialog.
See lessAs he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Wow, I would think that you read my book that this is based on with what you wrote there. I think you got the gist quite well. Let me mull that over a bit.
Wow, I would think that you read my book that this is based on with what you wrote there. I think you got the gist quite well. Let me mull that over a bit.
See lessAs he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
In a post-apocalyptic world >>Again post-apocalyptic? says it all (took your advice) an average college student leaves his bomb shelter >> Add more on the WHO and finds himself in a race against time >>Good. A ticking clock. (Obviously kept this) to save what remains of humanity frRead more
In a post-apocalyptic world
>>Again post-apocalyptic? says it all (took your advice)
an average college student leaves his bomb shelter
>> Add more on the WHO
and finds himself in a race against time
>>Good. A ticking clock. (Obviously kept this)
to save what remains of humanity from extermination
>> Added what he must do, demonstrate worth — will he succeed and save all of humanity, just himself, or no one. This is what I ultimately want to convey.
by an alien race who experiment on humans like rats in a maze.
>>mysterious entity? ? Yahweh? Vishnu? Aliens? ET? Once again, rather vague. And mysterious doesn?t necessarily imply that it?s malevolent, destructive (put back the rats in a maze, and the alien experiment lends to the malevolence.)
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