1. Posted: February 25, 2018In:

    After his famous brother is ritually murdered, a distraught writer, delves into a seedy underworld, hindered by suspects influential family, tries to snare the accused before he escapes to safe haven.

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    My take: After a vengeful writer connects his brother's unconventional death to an influential family, he becomes their next target on his way to seek total justice.

    My take:

    After a vengeful writer connects his brother’s unconventional death to an influential family, he becomes their next target on his way to seek total justice.

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  2. Posted: March 30, 2018In:

    A man having an affair takes his mistress out to the woods when they witness two thugs dumping a body the lake.

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    That would be an event not a logline For it to be a Logline, it should be something along the lines.. "When an illegitimate couple trying to pull out of the woods witness two thugs dumping a body, they learn the corpse to be his wife [and must reach this specific goal] now (hopefully) with clear staRead more

    That would be an event not a logline

    For it to be a Logline, it should be something along the lines..

    “When an illegitimate couple trying to pull out of the woods witness two thugs dumping a body, they learn the corpse to be his wife [and must reach this specific goal]

    now (hopefully) with clear stakes, the plot thickens..

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  3. Posted: March 30, 2018In:

    During a wedding rehearsal, a bridesmaid is taken by pirates and becomes the prize of the battle of ego vs revenge between two of the most powerful pirate ships.

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    Based on your premise (which sounds cool!) When a kidnapped bridesmaid becomes the prize in a historic feud between two almighty pirate ships, [this particular protagonist] must [reach this particular goal] or risk her forever (Insert your protagonist and his dramatic need)

    Based on your premise (which sounds cool!)

    When a kidnapped bridesmaid becomes the prize in a historic feud between two almighty pirate ships, [this particular protagonist] must [reach this particular goal] or risk her forever

    (Insert your protagonist and his dramatic need)

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