1. Posted: March 22, 2018In:

    An alien politician whose world was colonised by humans must fight a corrupt system and a supremacist organisation to rise to the top.

    variable Uberwriter

    Do you mean an alien standing against the supremacy of humans in a colony of their own creating? Another take could be: In a human colonised world, an alien politician must fight their corrupt and supremacist system to rise to the top. (It still lacks an inciting incident and a clear protagonist)

    Do you mean an alien standing against the supremacy of humans in a colony of their own creating?

    Another take could be:
    In a human colonised world, an alien politician must fight their corrupt and supremacist system to rise to the top.

    (It still lacks an inciting incident and a clear protagonist)

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  2. Posted: March 21, 2018In:

    When a young man washes-up dead in a desolate coastal town, his self-centred estranged mother must fight against apathy and hostility to uncover the truth, at the risk of exposing her own culpability.

    variable Uberwriter

    As a result of the discovery of her son's corpse what must she do which translates in >>>fighting against apathy and hostility to uncover the truth, at the risk of exposing her own culpability Also are you sure about a self-centred protagonist? How does it operate in your scheme?

    As a result of the discovery of her son’s corpse what must she do which translates in
    >>>fighting against apathy and hostility to uncover the truth, at the risk of exposing her own culpability

    Also are you sure about a self-centred protagonist? How does it operate in your scheme?

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  3. Posted: March 21, 2018In:

    A Rebellious Saharan Princess, escapes the palace to search for her abducted mother, but discovers she is the key to the survival or enslavement of the world.

    variable Uberwriter

    How exactly is she "the key to the survival or enslavement of the world"? What must she do as a result? How does it tie back to her mother's abduction?

    How exactly is she “the key to the survival or enslavement of the world”?
    What must she do as a result?
    How does it tie back to her mother’s abduction?

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