1. Posted: May 10, 2019In:

    After delivering a raped black teenager’s mixed race baby in 1950s Louisiana, a black midwife risks her life to bring the father to justice.

    Ckharper Samurai

    With the change of time period, she wouldn?t be a slave in the 1950s. Here?s a take: ?After delivering the baby of a raped teenager, a black midwive risks her life to bring the white rapist to justice in 1950s America.? I think the fact the teenager is black is now inferred in this Logline. UnfortunRead more

    With the change of time period, she wouldn?t be a slave in the 1950s.

    Here?s a take:

    ?After delivering the baby of a raped teenager, a black midwive risks her life to bring the white rapist to justice in 1950s America.?

    I think the fact the teenager is black is now inferred in this Logline.

    Unfortunately for this kind of story to work in this era I think she?d need help from say a white lawyer. Probably not police. Especially if we are taking about the South. And then you run into the criticism that these stories become about white saviors. Read up on why many African Americans hated Greenbook. It still won best picture. But I think there is a growing mindfulness in Hollywood about this concern.

    So if you can come up with a credible way to avoid a ?white savior? character then that?s fantastic. Like maybe set it in the North and find a black lawyer to help.

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  2. Posted: May 7, 2019In:

    Series logline: A rich, successful plastic surgeon and reformed sex addict, suffering intimacy problems with a woman who offers him stability, returns to his former psychiatrist, a manipulative woman for whom he might still be madly in love with.

    Ckharper Samurai

    I like your reason why he was going back to therapy before - to be able to be intimate with woman he actually cares about. How about ? ?When a reformed sex addict can?t be intimate with a girl he actually cares about, he seeks help from a sex psychiatrist. But her unorthodox methods involve increasiRead more

    I like your reason why he was going back to therapy before – to be able to be intimate with woman he actually cares about. How about ?

    ?When a reformed sex addict can?t be intimate with a girl he actually cares about, he seeks help from a sex psychiatrist. But her unorthodox methods involve increasingly kinky and dangerous games he may never escape.?

    I didn?t count the words, maybe too wordy, but something along those lines.

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  3. Posted: May 7, 2019In:

    Halloween decorations only in October, no flowers in the parkway ? clearly the neighborhood HOA has become tyrannical. A group of moms plot a takeover during their weekly bunco night, and the only thing in their way is the idiot president and his old white guy friends.

    Ckharper Samurai

    Here?s a another (serious) take after taking heavily from Richiev- ?When the HOA president inflicts draconian rules on the neighborhood, a fed-up mom and her friends plot a coup to takeover the HOA. They conspire under cover of darkness ? at their weekly bunco nights.? Title: Bunco Night First senteRead more

    Here?s a another (serious) take after taking heavily from Richiev-

    ?When the HOA president inflicts draconian rules on the neighborhood, a fed-up mom and her friends plot a coup to takeover the HOA. They conspire under cover of darkness ? at their weekly bunco nights.?

    Title: Bunco Night

    First sentence could hang on its own at 23 words.
    Second sentence feels optional (11 words) but I like setting up the title and adding a bit more comedy.

    Anyhow, gives me a good footing to actually take a spin at developing. Thanks all!

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