1. Posted: December 26, 2017In:

    pls comment on it

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Remove the title. Get you back a few words. A desperate teacher kidnaps a student from a wealthy family to get money to pay for his daughter?s chemotherapy.

    Remove the title. Get you back a few words.

    A desperate teacher kidnaps a student from a wealthy family to get money to pay for his daughter?s chemotherapy.

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  2. Posted: December 24, 2017In:

    A Rescue Story

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    There is an opportunity for a ?but?. At the end think of adding a complication from your story. ... but soon discovers he needs the help of others to succeed. Probably not your story. But you get the point.

    There is an opportunity for a ?but?.

    At the end think of adding a complication from your story.

    … but soon discovers he needs the help of others to succeed.

    Probably not your story. But you get the point.

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  3. Posted: December 21, 2017In:

    When a black high school football star mysteriously disappears, his four daring friends and their dog set out to find him, unraveling the sinister secrets of their town and the work of a serial killer.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Getting there. Sinister town is still vague. Are they working with the serial killer? It?s too vague to form an opinion about your story. .... discovering the work of a serial killer and the conspiracy of the town folk to keep it quiet.

    Getting there. Sinister town is still vague. Are they working with the serial killer? It?s too vague to form an opinion about your story.

    …. discovering the work of a serial killer and the conspiracy of the town folk to keep it quiet.

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