1. Posted: November 1, 2017In:

    When a young girl is forced into the sex trade, she must choose her path to freedom even if it involves a vampire.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    To escape from the sex trade a young woman must... Now how does the Vampire play into it; or A Vampire offers... as a means to help a young woman escape the sex trade. Trapped in the sex trader a young is offered help by a Vampire if she .... Lots of options.

    To escape from the sex trade a young woman must…

    Now how does the Vampire play into it; or

    A Vampire offers… as a means to help a young woman escape the sex trade.

    Trapped in the sex trader a young is offered help by a Vampire if she ….

    Lots of options.

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  2. Posted: September 30, 2017In:

    A inflexible stoic self-disciplined detective has trust issues due to a traumatic past making moving forward in life an obstacle.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    "Moving on" is the story. Tell us that. A detective wants a relationship with xxxx but he is held back by events in his past. Then keep working from there. What event does the story revolve around.

    “Moving on” is the story. Tell us that. A detective wants a relationship with xxxx but he is held back by events in his past.

    Then keep working from there.

    What event does the story revolve around.

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  3. Posted: September 30, 2017In:

    When an Iwi investor whanagungatanga is threatened, he must relinquish his fears at a maximum personal cost and risk to encounter a spiritual revelation that awakens his true identity in God.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Not sure what the story is and especially that massive word starting with "W". Try describing it physically with a goal that needs achieving and an obstacle.

    Not sure what the story is and especially that massive word starting with “W”.

    Try describing it physically with a goal that needs achieving and an obstacle.

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