1. Posted: September 11, 2017In:

    A female bounty hunter holds an innocent man hostage as bait to trap his future-self: a fugitive killer from 20 years in the future able to project mind-warping illusions.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I've just removed the "future"s for an easier read. A female bounty hunter holds an innocent man hostage as bait to trap the hostages?future-self: a killer from able to project mind-warping illusions.

    I’ve just removed the “future”s for an easier read.

    A female bounty hunter holds an innocent man hostage as bait to trap the hostages?future-self: a killer from able to project mind-warping illusions.

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  2. Posted: September 14, 2017In:

    A dracula who hates killing people for blood finds a companionship in a coward son of a gangster.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Give Drac a goal and then how his friendship effects it. Drac is going to suicide because he hates killing but finds a new lease on life when he meets ... and helps him to.... That sort of thing.

    Give Drac a goal and then how his friendship effects it.

    Drac is going to suicide because he hates killing but finds a new lease on life when he meets … and helps him to….

    That sort of thing.

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  3. Posted: September 13, 2017In:

    A relief party of argonauts is assembled to reestablish correspondence with a gold claim in the mountains of California where a terrible beast sentinels a vast fortune.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    This will sound harsh. The logline is about your story not about you. You can write the crap out of a sentence but I don't know exactly what the story is about.

    This will sound harsh. The logline is about your story not about you. You can write the crap out of a sentence but I don’t know exactly what the story is about.

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