1. Posted: April 15, 2017In:

    When the only girl he’s ever known is taken away, a boy must escape the robot who bred him in order to find her.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Or tells us he is trying to find who took her as well. Try reordering the line as well. Bred by robots in a lab, a boy escapes to tracked do who has taken the only girl he has ever know and save her.

    Or tells us he is trying to find who took her as well.

    Try reordering the line as well.

    Bred by robots in a lab, a boy escapes to tracked do who has taken the only girl he has ever know and save her.

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  2. Posted: April 15, 2017In:

    UNRELATABLE – An academic teen prodigy with zero social skills hires the dumbest jock imaginable to teach him how to attract his crush in time for prom.

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    I'd drop 'zero social skills' to is an easy assumption. Teen can go like Richiev said. An academic prodigy hires the dumbest Jock to teach how to attract his crush before prom.

    I’d drop ‘zero social skills’ to is an easy assumption. Teen can go like Richiev said.

    An academic prodigy hires the dumbest Jock to teach how to attract his crush before prom.

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  3. Posted: April 15, 2017In:

    ROCKY ROAD – An overweight weekend warrior basketball player gets a once in a lifetime chance to play Lebron James one-on-one in a bout in which he strives to hold his own for his self-respect.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Short film perhaps. Too wordy. Find a way of describing the guy under six words, chubby amateur, The game would be the cherry on top. Describe the cake.

    Short film perhaps.

    Too wordy. Find a way of describing the guy under six words, chubby amateur,

    The game would be the cherry on top. Describe the cake.

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