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After a sudden string of cattle mutilations a group of hunters are employed by the community to find and kill the predator responsible. However after venturing deep into the woods the group soon discover something far more sinister then simply just a wild animal.
I think we need the something in the logline. This is all set up, which is about 10 pages of a 100 page script. Hunters employed to find the animal responsible for a series of cattle mutations...... Now the story. Someone may be able to offer even a short way of getting to the story.
I think we need the something in the logline. This is all set up, which is about 10 pages of a 100 page script.
Hunters employed to find the animal responsible for a series of cattle mutations……
Now the story. Someone may be able to offer even a short way of getting to the story.
See lessWhen a recluse, who can use his memories to transfer his consciousness into his younger self, remembers a fragment of a repressed memory pertaining to the night his mother was murdered, he undergoes therapy to restore it in full so he can go back and save her life.
I'd say therapy goes to midpoint. But that's just how'd I write it. I'd drop all the reclusive stuff. Plus it is a bit wordy in the middle. A man that can transfer his consciousness to his younger self through memory goes to therapy to unlock the memory of his mother's murder so he can go back and sRead more
I’d say therapy goes to midpoint. But that’s just how’d I write it. I’d drop all the reclusive stuff. Plus it is a bit wordy in the middle.
A man that can transfer his consciousness to his younger self through memory goes to therapy to unlock the memory of his mother’s murder so he can go back and stop it.
Still needs a polish. There must be a quicker way to describe the reason for therapy.
See lessFour hunters, all strangers, become lost in the woods while on the hunt for a rare but dangerous animal. Now they must survive the elements, the mysterious animal and themselves as they discover that not all of them are who they initially claimed to be.
Also think about removing double explanations. Eg hunters on a hunting trip, people on a hunting trip are hunters. ?So we can start with Four strangers on a hunting trip. ?Why must they survive, what triggers that? Don't have to saying they were hunting and animal, you cover that again later. AfterRead more
Also think about removing double explanations. Eg hunters on a hunting trip, people on a hunting trip are hunters. ?So we can start with Four strangers on a hunting trip. ?Why must they survive, what triggers that? Don’t have to saying they were hunting and animal, you cover that again later.
After xxxxxx four strangers on a hunting trip must survive the elements, each other and the creature were hunting.
I hope this helps
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