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The dormant, youthful love of two hopeless romantics is suddenly ignited to life as they trade names to profess their love… and their identity.
Richie is right. ?It is okay to make readers wonder how the story may be executed, but you're making them wonder what the story is. ?Could be 89 year olds, could be teens, could be aliens. ?Could be set on a fishing boat or in a castle. There is at any moment in time about 100,000 spec scripts floatRead more
Richie is right. ?It is okay to make readers wonder how the story may be executed, but you’re making them wonder what the story is. ?Could be 89 year olds, could be teens, could be aliens. ?Could be set on a fishing boat or in a castle.
There is at any moment in time about 100,000 spec scripts floating around. ?With that much choice a producer isn’t going to dig to find gold, he’ll just wait for it to float by.
Your logline would be too much hard work, no one is going to ask you to clarify.
See lessAs war consumes a planet, a noble warrior is born to pick a side and it is up to him to protect them and ensure their survival. It’s rusty. I am no writer, which is why I need your help. Be brutally honest. Please and thank you.
There is a rule for screenwriting. ?Start the story as late as possible and finish as soon as possible. ?That prevent boredom and focus the story. ?In reality, we probably don't care about his childhood, that can be a three minute montage (I wouldn't do that either). ?Plus people are born a gender nRead more
There is a rule for screenwriting. ?Start the story as late as possible and finish as soon as possible. ?That prevent boredom and focus the story. ?In reality, we probably don’t care about his childhood, that can be a three minute montage (I wouldn’t do that either). ?Plus people are born a gender not a profession.
So try this (start late – end soon).
A Noble warrior must choose a side in a global conflict know his decision will bring and end to the opposing race.
A noble warrior must choose a side in a global conflict know his decision will bring about his own death.
Having a logline which is just a decision isn’t really enough to support an entire film. ?Give him a goal that will have numerous obstacles.
A noble warrior discovers a secret that leads him to betray his army by supporting a greatly outnumbered local resistance, he must now rescue his family who believe him to be a traitor.
Not your story and the line needs work and tightening. ?But you can see so much conflict to explore.
See lessA group of criminals see their escape from prison when an infamous prison breaker arrive. The problem however : he doesn’t want to escape anymore.
I read this and thought "hangover" in prison. ?Just tidy up the English. Does there have to be a main character? ?Yes and no. ?But this is selling the story not telling the story. You could start withe the desire (goal) and the obstacle. Three prison see a chance to escape when the greatest escapeeRead more
I read this and thought “hangover” in prison. ?Just tidy up the English.
Does there have to be a main character? ?Yes and no. ?But this is selling the story not telling the story.
You could start withe the desire (goal) and the obstacle.
Three prison see a chance to escape when the greatest escapee of all time is sent to their prison. ?They have to convince him to escape when all he wants to do is serve his time.
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