1. Posted: November 6, 2016In:

    When twin vixens working in a Texas Diner have their freedom threatened by two bandits, they must face the evil lurking in their nightmares or they?ll be enslaved for eternity.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    This needs clarity. This line creates or questions than it answers. If we look at the line after the bandits, what does it mean? Try "they want", "this is stopping them", "therefore they must" Think of it this way. A director is look for a film to make. He knows his budget, so what has he learnt froRead more

    This needs clarity. This line creates or questions than it answers.

    If we look at the line after the bandits, what does it mean?

    Try “they want”, “this is stopping them”, “therefore they must”

    Think of it this way. A director is look for a film to make. He knows his budget, so what has he learnt from your logline?

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  2. Posted: October 15, 2016In:

    After a special forces operative witnesses experiments on soldiers & prisoners, he abandons a promising military career & returns to the quiet life. But when a deadly outbreak reeks of government conspiracy & threatens his family, he jumps into the fight to expose the culprits & track down the cure.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I try to hit what the person wants at a life level and then put in an event that shows it. I also try to be as specific as possible. ?Underlying emotional journey is implied and expected so you don't need to hit them to hard in your logline. This will not be your story, but an example. After a contaRead more

    I try to hit what the person wants at a life level and then put in an event that shows it. I also try to be as specific as possible. ?Underlying emotional journey is implied and expected so you don’t need to hit them to hard in your logline.

    This will not be your story, but an example.

    After a contagion is released a DC insider (be specific) pulls every string to save his family even though it may cost the lives of millions, reach a final decision of mass death or his family

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  3. Posted: October 8, 2016In:

    Wanting to be independent of her abusive alcoholic father a teen takes driving lessons with her pensioner neighbour discovery the father figure she needs and caring really means.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    She knows she trapped in a loser situation. The first step is a licence. With a licence she can get a job driving for someone, like a delivery van. She may even get her own car. She can use dad's car,. He has lost his license drink driving. The underlying message is that she thinks all people are crRead more

    She knows she trapped in a loser situation. The first step is a licence. With a licence she can get a job driving for someone, like a delivery van. She may even get her own car. She can use dad’s car,. He has lost his license drink driving.

    The underlying message is that she thinks all people are crap. Based on her life experiences.

    Through the driving lessons she learns people are good and sometimes it okay to care. The old man is a good father figure.

    She learns to trust and care, the old man gains some self respect in a world that forgets the elderly.

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