1. Posted: February 4, 2020In:

    When a devoted ex criminal desired to start a righteous past completes her prison term, she is dragged back into the criminal underworld after her son is kidnapped by her ex crime mob boss and forced to complete numerous tasks, before he ends up dead.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    A reformed ex-convict is forced to xxxx when her old boss kidnaps her son. You don?t need to be too poetic. Add words that can have a direct impact on the visuals of the film. So a person can see what you are describing. Plus a reformed person desires all the things you talk about.

    A reformed ex-convict is forced to xxxx when her old boss kidnaps her son.

    You don?t need to be too poetic. Add words that can have a direct impact on the visuals of the film. So a person can see what you are describing.

    Plus a reformed person desires all the things you talk about.

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  2. Posted: January 28, 2020In:

    A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks Rich, but that is a completely different film. That is really quite straight forward. We are watching him struggle with reality. This story has the audience question what they are seeing as well. The ?is he or isn?t he? feeling.

    Thanks Rich, but that is a completely different film. That is really quite straight forward. We are watching him struggle with reality. This story has the audience question what they are seeing as well.

    The ?is he or isn?t he? feeling.

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  3. Posted: January 28, 2020In:

    A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks everyone, Do we have any logline rewrite suggestions? So a bit more of the story. The guys is actually a newly create personality. ?The ?other personalities is trying to drive him to commit suicide. There is a dominant personality which is also a serial killer. ?The dominant personality alwayRead more

    Thanks everyone,

    Do we have any logline rewrite suggestions?

    So a bit more of the story.

    The guys is actually a newly create personality. ?The ?other personalities is trying to drive him to commit suicide. There is a dominant personality which is also a serial killer. ?The dominant personality always takes control when he can sense something, hence the new personality.

    The girl does not exist. She is a voice from the basement he is trying to help escape once he hears her. ? She is used in the story to give him an insight into how the victims were feeling.

    Finally he learns the truth and kills himself.

    It looks at the question ?is a person responsible for actions they are aware? ?would you die to save others?

    So I have a story.

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