1. Posted: January 25, 2020In: ,

    The wife and mistress of a loathed man conspire to execute a perfect plan that makes it appear he accidentally drowned in a swimming pool — and then the body disappears.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    After the wife and mistress of a loathed man make it appear he accidentally drowned in a swimming pool his body disappears. (I don't know what happens next).

    After the wife and mistress of a loathed man make it appear he accidentally drowned in a swimming pool his body disappears. (I don’t know what happens next).

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  2. Posted: January 27, 2020In:

    After her family is killed, a young woman escapes in order to avoid the same fate only to discover a family secret that will soon have her running back home in order to confront those who hurt her family.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    The only question I have is, escapes what? Running back home doesn't tell me that was the place she escaped. Plus hurt her family seems a weak description for killing.? You could use "those responsible", saves words. I look forward to reading a rewrite is you post one.

    The only question I have is, escapes what?

    Running back home doesn’t tell me that was the place she escaped.

    Plus hurt her family seems a weak description for killing.? You could use “those responsible”, saves words.

    I look forward to reading a rewrite is you post one.

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  3. Posted: September 28, 2019In:

    Animal activists do a night raid on a facility only to discover human not animal unwilling test subjects. They are now trapped with a security force willing to kill them to protect the secret.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Or A group of activists must escape a test facility while eluding murderous security after discover human test subject not animals.

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    A group of activists must escape a test facility while eluding murderous security after discover human test subject not animals.

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