1. Posted: January 28, 2020In:

    A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Second attempt:A man with multiple personalities is held captive in an abandoned farm by a murderous cult or his own personalities. While escaping he finds a girl, who may or may not exist. They must escape before they are killed.?During the story we find out that he believes he has some disorder, hRead more

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    A man with multiple personalities is held captive in an abandoned farm by a murderous cult or his own personalities. While escaping he finds a girl, who may or may not exist. They must escape before they are killed.

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    During the story we find out that he believes he has some disorder, he loses huge blocks of time. He is unaware of the other personalities.

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  2. Posted: January 28, 2020In:

    A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks Mike. You are correct I have forgotten to give you the setting. He only discovers he has multiple personalities at the very end of the story. He believe everything is real (but the viewer is unsure). Of course the first George would have said to the producers was ?Darth Vader is Luke?s fatherRead more

    Thanks Mike. You are correct I have forgotten to give you the setting. He only discovers he has multiple personalities at the very end of the story. He believe everything is real (but the viewer is unsure).

    Of course the first George would have said to the producers was ?Darth Vader is Luke?s father?. The producers would lose their minds. Then George would explain how it happens.

    The ?sell ?don?t tell?saying ?is about how you write, not what you write. Don?t write a shopping list, use skill and interesting writing.

     

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  3. Posted: January 28, 2020In:

    A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks. I like finding out what people feel. If I remove the twist the logline becomes a bit boring. Plus the twist is nearly always the most important parts. ?Luke I am your father?. A man must escape a murderous cult. A bit boring. The girl is discovered while he is trying to escape. He just can?tRead more

    Thanks. I like finding out what people feel.

    If I remove the twist the logline becomes a bit boring. Plus the twist is nearly always the most important parts.

    ?Luke I am your father?.

    A man must escape a murderous cult. A bit boring.

    The girl is discovered while he is trying to escape. He just can?t leave her.

    She isn?t his first goal, but becomes important.

    I?ll think of a new version and post it.

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