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  1. Posted: February 19, 2015In: Public

    Fed up with stiff regulations preventing people from getting the organs they need, Dr. Andrea Sellers dives into the seedy world of the underground organ trade. (1 hour cable drama)

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    Added an answer on February 19, 2015 at 3:03 pm

    The line works. The one thing I have to comment on is "Dives". "Dives" for me would indicate a enthusiastic adoption of something. Someone may dive into a culture or a sport. It just sounds a little happy for the back market organ trade. This could have really dark tones. I think you can find a wordRead more

    The line works. The one thing I have to comment on is “Dives”. “Dives” for me would indicate a enthusiastic adoption of something. Someone may dive into a culture or a sport. It just sounds a little happy for the back market organ trade.

    This could have really dark tones. I think you can find a word that has that mood.

    The motivation is probably great in the story. But I can’t see a Doctor who has invested a lifetime of effort into a career, would be willing to through it all away due to a frustration in red tape. The events that have frustrated the Doctor, such as unneeded deaths, may read with a great sense of importance.

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  2. Posted: February 19, 2015In: Public

    Fed up with stiff regulations preventing people from getting the organs they need, Dr. Andrea Sellers dives into the seedy world of the underground organ trade. (1 hour cable drama)

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter
    Added an answer on February 19, 2015 at 3:03 pm

    The line works. The one thing I have to comment on is "Dives". "Dives" for me would indicate a enthusiastic adoption of something. Someone may dive into a culture or a sport. It just sounds a little happy for the back market organ trade. This could have really dark tones. I think you can find a wordRead more

    The line works. The one thing I have to comment on is “Dives”. “Dives” for me would indicate a enthusiastic adoption of something. Someone may dive into a culture or a sport. It just sounds a little happy for the back market organ trade.

    This could have really dark tones. I think you can find a word that has that mood.

    The motivation is probably great in the story. But I can’t see a Doctor who has invested a lifetime of effort into a career, would be willing to through it all away due to a frustration in red tape. The events that have frustrated the Doctor, such as unneeded deaths, may read with a great sense of importance.

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  3. Posted: February 19, 2015In: Public

    For 10 years this man has been having accurate visions of events seven days into the future. Last night he saw his own murder at the hands of a woman he doesn't know.

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    Added an answer on February 19, 2015 at 9:43 am

    Nir, I was trying to avoid the question, "Why not Just get on a plane and fly to the Arctic?". Hence underlining the point of accurate. Perhaps I should find a way of getting the "unchangeable" nature of his visions.

    Nir,

    I was trying to avoid the question, “Why not Just get on a plane and fly to the Arctic?”. Hence underlining the point of accurate. Perhaps I should find a way of getting the “unchangeable” nature of his visions.

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