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When fantasy characters invade the big city’s system, a frustrated dreamer must deal his imaginary robot girlfriend came to life, but when she remembers being someone who was kidnapped years ago by the head of organized crime, they must team up to unravel the mysteries of the other characters past lifes by using brute force and a two-faced mask to cover their insecurities.
We have all heard the expression “Less is more” well the reverse is also true “More is Less”. The more you pile on the less visible the story becomes. What I am seeing is a huge amount of plot. But not a single really character. When it is all said and done. Movies are about people. Even Pixar has tRead more
We have all heard the expression “Less is more” well the reverse is also true “More is Less”. The more you pile on the less visible the story becomes. What I am seeing is a huge amount of plot. But not a single really character. When it is all said and done. Movies are about people. Even Pixar has to make cars into people for it to be a story.
Frustrated Dreamer isn’t really a character. That doesn’t tell me anything about who they are. Even in the early version what exactly does “loses his humanity” when in the context of the story. I wish I could writer a version of your story as a way of helping. But I cant see what the story would be yet. I am seeing a collection of action sequences.
See lessA priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.
Your story can (and should) have heaps of twists and turns. But a logline should give a clear pitch of the story. People assume Logline X 100 complex things equals movie. So logline confused by too much X 100 equal confusing train wreck of a film. I was listen to a logline competition on a podcast aRead more
Your story can (and should) have heaps of twists and turns. But a logline should give a clear pitch of the story.
People assume Logline X 100 complex things equals movie.
So logline confused by too much X 100 equal confusing train wreck of a film.
I was listen to a logline competition on a podcast and the winner was “A man clones his wife so he can fall in love with her again”.
You know there is going to be twists and turns, but that is the story at its core.
See lessMaximus comes back to life as his body is ignited on the funeral pyre, sparking an escape and betrayal rife with visions of heaven and hell which condemn him back to the coliseum.
What is his aim. What are the goals of the story. What may stop him? Just a general observation. A lot of your loglines are pretty but lack any story. Don’t believe the idea that a logline has to be mystical and ambiguous. It is a micro job interview. A producer reads thousands of loglines. She is nRead more
What is his aim. What are the goals of the story. What may stop him?
Just a general observation. A lot of your loglines are pretty but lack any story. Don’t believe the idea that a logline has to be mystical and ambiguous. It is a micro job interview. A producer reads thousands of loglines. She is not going to stop and investigate a logline which is pretty but says very little. There are 999 others that may have a good story.
The Gadiator Maximus resurrected during his cremation …… [insert story here].
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